The Employee by joshua schwebel
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Re: Final review of Josh's Artist Narrative

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Dear Jessica,

Please find attached Michelle Lacombe’s essay for your review.

Thank you,
Lauren

Attachments:

  • file Lacombe_The Employee_12Dec23.docx

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Jess,

I’ve just received a fact-check inquiry back and had to make some adjustments to the final paragraph of page 5. 

Here is the updated document. 

Thanks,
Lauren


Attachments:

  • file Lacombe_The Employee_13Dec23.docx

Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hello!

Okay great - thanks for this. I’ll should be able to get this back to you by the end of the week.

Thanks,
J
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Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Thanks Jessica,
We are appreciate your work!
-L



Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi again Jessica,

We have this conversation with Denise Ryner ready for your edit too!

Please find attached. 

Best wishes,
Lauren

Attachments:

  • file The Employee_Ryner convo_14Dec.docx

Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Great - got it!

J
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Jessica Antony (she/her)
Writing | Editing | Publishing | Communicating

Please note that my email response time is, on average, 48 hours.


Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Lauren,

Here is the conversation with Denise Ryder, copyedited.

Have a great rest of your weekend!
Jessica

Attachments:

  • file Ryder JA Edit.docx

Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Thanks Jessica!

Can I get your thoughts on the use of URLs? In general I think that their length and unreadability is disruptive to the flow of the text. For instance, I totally take your point about being more specific with URLs in footnote 7, but I feel like it would make reading that note impossible.

is there an alternative citation model that I can use in these cases?

Best,
Lauren


Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Lauren,

URLs are definitely a pain, especially in a hard copy document. As for footnote 7, I think adding the URLs in parentheses after the sentence that is referencing each of them will make them useable. They’re ultimately not great for readability by their nature, but if they’re going to be provided to readers for further reference, I think it makes more sense to add them where they’re noted, rather than listed at the end of the note (making it less clear which URL refers to which aspect of the note).

I’m not sure of any other method for citation that would make them any easier to incorporate.

That’s my two cents!
J
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Jessica Antony (she/her)
Writing | Editing | Publishing | Communicating

Please note that my email response time is, on average, 48 hours.


Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > To: Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Thanks Jessica, and for the thorough review! 

I’ve accepted all your notes and will send the document to Denise for a final review.

Merci,
Lauren


Jessica Antony <███████████████████████ > To: Lauren Wetmore <████████████████████████████████ > Cc: Josh Schwebel <privatejosh@gmail.com>

Hi Lauren,

Attached is the copyedited version of Michelle Lacombe’s piece.

Best,
J

Attachments:

  • file Lacombe JA Edit.docx